I thought it was artistic. It seemed a little gloomy because it was talking about a murder but thats okay. I liked how you used the butterfly throughout the song :)
I just read this story of Umbreon and Espeon. I grew up with Pokemon from the very beginning. These two Pokemon has been a big subject of romance every since they were introduced in The Pokemon Johto and Generation II. They have a much more exotic feel out of all the eeveelutions, even with the new Leafeon and Glaceon. I really enjoyed this story. It seemed to capture the edge of Umbreon pretty well and I thought Espeon was adorable. The story itself was pretty clever for having Pokemon School with ground class, electric class, and etc. The story also was very interesting and it did not seem very predictable. The passing of the story was good also. I do have one suggestion maybe have more Pokemon battles in the future? Especially with Umbreon in the fight that'd be very cool. I really enjoyed reading this. I hope you write more. Please do. I am very engrossed and interested in what happens next. This story has so much potential and possibility.
A Fan of Your Work,
Ryan Whitlock
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