I like your poem it is really interesting and nice. Add emotions inside the poem more. And add descriptions, like " save your beautiful tears" the word beautiful describe the tears. I also like when you put idioms like " A new dress, the world is going to wear" So i like your poem it is neat and it got a flow.
I like your poem it sound good and neat. You make it a nice flow with the rhyming words and the organization. I also like you describe in the poem. I came to this poem because in your description it is really catchy."A mansion calls to its victims. Will you be the next one?" And in the end of the poem it is a really nice cliffhanger.
I LOVE your poem it relate to me during the first day of school. I dress cool as I can and walk into the school's yard and saw my friends. I went to my class and looking at every face in my class. Some people were in my class last year and some are not. When it's the time to go home I just don't want to leave and stay and know my classmate a little more. I share my first day of school to my parents and i went to sleep early for another day of school.
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