that was a really good story. it had me captivated by the suspense, but then in the end, i just started to laugh really hard. well don. i hope to read more of your stories.
that was great. there were some grammatical errors and i saw a couple of mispelled words, but otherwise the chapter is great. i know that there's going to be a happy ending in this story, but i just want to know if adit is going to stay even though he can't? you don't have to tell me if you don't want to. i can wait, it's just that i kind of got attached to him. congratulations on receiving an upgraded membership by the way, my mom wouldn't pay for it either. someone sent me one as a gift as well, but i don't know who.
that was funny. it kind of caught me off guard when i saw the word 'elves,' but then i just started laughing a couple of seconds after seeing the word. great job.
i've always wanted to write a ghost story, but i could never do it. you did an amazing job with this story. it felt a little rushed, but it's still great.
that was funny. i can't wait for more. the name adit sounds a little weird though. does it mean something? does it reveal something about where he came from.
i thought that that was a great story. i like the characters, especially george; he sort of reminds me of my friend. anyway, i think that the ending is pretty cute even though it ended too fast. maybe you can add more to it. maybe write what happens during their vacation. all in all, great story, it had me laughing.
I thought that it was worth reading. I've been working on a story with the same concept, and I'm relieved that I'm not the only one. I sort of knew how the story would end, but I like how you tried to add suspense. The story is also well thought out. Great job.
That was a great poem. I definitely like how you tried to write it with a rhyming scheme. I know how hard it is to write a peome that actually rhymes (for me at least). Anyway, I like the concept of the poems. At firt, I thought that it was going to be one of those sad poems, but then it actually has a happy ending. If it doesn't actually have a happy ending, then I apologize for assuming that. Maybe that's just how I see it.
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