I loved the way in which you addressed the topic and how the title says so much about the content.
The images of cycles are always present and you finish it by alowing the possibility of everything starting again, very smart!
The verse that says "rain drips down crating tears" is outstanding, perhaps my favourite. It is highly graphic yet very musical, you can "feel" those raindrop-tears sliding.
I loved the way in which you used "nest" in the last stanza!
The only small detail that I didn't like as much was the rhyme, perhaps with a different one the poem could have even more strength. Still that's just my humble oppinion...
I liked the poem very much and I think it's not only vert touching but also very easy to relate to. People tend to reopen their wounds constantly (at least I know I do!) and it is good that somebody points it out!
I'll keep on reading your writtings, I enjoyed this one very much!
Xime
First of all congrats on the poem, I like the way you manage to portray your feelings and get the reader involved in your poem.
The title is perfect and powerful, it attracted me instantly.
I like the spacing, it is very effective.
Still I would work still on the punctuation in order to make the poem have even further impact. It is a poem that could make goosebumps rise, but it is not there just yet. Keep it up, it has amazing potential!
Continue writing! I hope to read more by you!
It is interesting and funny. I love the way in which you show all the things that kids can do to make adults lose their mind, and how you use a very fast pace that can equate to the way parents move about their young.
The "well," you use at the end seems like a sigh, and then just to short stanzas that wrap it all up an make it possible for everything to start again.
I enjoyed it so much!!! Keep it up!!!
And if you want, review some of my work sometime too!
Your poem managed to have me focused on it from the first word all through the last.. it is very impressive! The imagery is so vivid that you can relive the moment with the poem. It can transmits the pain and fear in an outstanding way. Good work!
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