This is a very interesting story. I would like to see it have more details about what she looked like and what type of animals were sorrounding them. Also maby you could have a lead up to why they need her help in the very begginning. Other wise this would be a very good story to turn into a noval.
Good luck, and enjoy writing your story
Xman
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