I liked the story! It was good, and it did a great job catching my attention. I sorta wish it was longer, so we could all hear about how he had come to be a prisoner, and who these "Drabak" lizard people were, but I'm guessing this was for the flash fiction contest. Other then that, I didn't see any mistakes! I would, for clarity, have added a comma between "You remember your wife, don't you?" I think it sounds better, and seperates it better. Also, maybe between "Listen, you Drabak scum." Just some thoughts, good job on this!
Have a great day!
Kittypet
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