This story was the best I ever read...seriously, it containted heart-wrenching pain, amazing drama, and the normal yet unexpected ups-and-downs of such a destined love ^.< I really like how in the end, all the mistaken lovers found their place, and Trent and Sophie ended up together
There were grammar problems, but it didn't hamper the reading process which only took 2 days!!! The flashbacks helped, and the events flowed nicely. I could also tell that the winter formal was definitely the climax, and I liked how it wasn't the resolution until way after. It gave an unexpected boost to the end of the story :D
However, maybe when Abby finally reconciles with Sophie, you could hint a few minutes earlier, maybe during the car ride, that Abby had a new sincerity in her eyes, thoughtfully looked out the window, or kept glancing at Sophie. Just a suggestion *^^*
Overall, this story was AMAZING; wonderful work, and definitely keep it up!!~!~!~!~
I really like this poem. I respect you for it:) its a very long poem but i didnt get bored of it. also, this poem is rhymed in every sentence and i think that is awsome! it rhymed while still making sense! this poem is actually repeating the same thing over and over...like it is just saying, you left me, i'm sad. but its really cool how you made it so long! in so many different ways! i DEFINITELY encourage you to keep writing!!!!!!!!!!
wowwww.................evil girl! this story was really good....I'm still in a daze from reading it. I read this because it was awarded and it was super! After the first sentence, I was like, hm, I'll just read it! And after the last sentence, I was like, ...wowwwwwwww! I could feel the betrayal and the sadness...aw! the girl lost her mom! that evil ghost-girl took her away:( this is such a well-written story! I really admire your talent in writing and creativity!
Hello!I liked your story but...you know that "thier" is actually spelled "their", right? besides that little typo, i liked it a lot! i want to read the rest of the story^^ its very typical and i like it
This was a good short story! Haha, enertaining! I like that connection between the mom and daughter. It seemed sort of comedic too. I liked it! I could imagine the whole scene in my head^^ I encourage you to write more short stories because I like reading short stories:) I enjoyed reading this so thanks!
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