This was quite well done. I was surprised at how well I can imagine the scene even when the biggest - even only - description of the setting is the first sentence. You've done a superb job here, not explaining much of the premise but allowing the reader to make their own inferences as to what happened before and after these one thousand-odd words.
The use of dialogue for about 95% of this work was effective, and this seriously makes me examine my compulsion to describe everything in my own works. I suppose I need to put more time into being a reader, to see how stories like yours can trigger the theatre of the mind.
I hope to come across some random works like these more often!
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