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I try to give comprehensive reviews.
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I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review of Loneliness  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

You wrote a short Shadorma about suicide. It's dark and depressing.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a pill would be great and really suit your writing in a haunting way.

I found the notes you made after the poem were really useful and pleasant to read.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote an essay intended to cheer anyone up about the changes that covid-19 caused.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are not well-chosen. Community would be a good choice.

I found this phrase unrealistic,
- One thing everyone can agree on is that everyone will make it through this pandemic.
- except the dead.
Your thesis is that the changes are for the better because it increased quality time with family (domestic violence statistics also increased), so your description should say so.

Well done writing an essay on the effects of the coronavirus.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a free verse poem that expressed irritation.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem boring although it was supposed to be funny. I think this is because you just sound irritated.

Well done writing your feelings so clearly.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

You wrote background descriptions of Martha's world. The reader doesn't know who Martha is, but knows she lives in a world where spies team up with assassins and trackers.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. The romance/love isn't clear in this stand alone piece.

Well done writing a good description.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of 愛の宝石  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a short, romantic poem about a person you compared to precious stones and minerals.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of gems would be great and really suit your writing.

I found you could have made the poem longer. You have a good idea and just need to believe in yourself.

Well done writing a good first stanza. Translating the title from Japanese would inform your readers who don't use a translator.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of I want  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)

You wrote an essay about balancing your role in your life with God's role in your life.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I could relate to wanting to know that donated money is well-spent. I think you're over-thinking the situation and just donate to the causes you want to support, and leave the rest to God.

Well done writing a good essay.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote an interesting and spell-binding poem about Henry VIII's first wife.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I learned a bit of history by reading your poem. I'd thought he'd had them all beheaded. I'm glad he didn't.

Well done writing some difficult rhymes. I use an online rhyme dictionary when writing poetry - it's an idea you can try.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Journal Entry #2  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a journal entry about taking a day off from writing.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are not well-chosen.

I found I could relate to needing to take a day off to get back into it. I hope you found a way to work your friend into the story as you'd hoped.


Well done writing a good but very short journal entry.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Summer  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful and fun, short poem about the joys of summer.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a chirping bird would be great and really suit your writing.

I like how cheerful your poem is.
I also like that you included the name of the form.

Well done writing a nice poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.0)

You wrote an essay on the responsibility of having a baby.

Grammar and spelling are questionable and distract me. See details below.
Genres are not well-chosen. Although this might have been an assignment, to us, it is an essay or article.

I found a few mistakes,
- your title is a grammar error,
- for mother but for father too - for the mother, but for the father, too.
- headache too for parents - headaches, too, for parents
- responsibility is concern father play the important role - responsibility is concerned, the father plays an important role

"This essay will argue on the role of father in upbringing of baby." However, you then go on to talk about the mother's role, and the father leaving. Then you talk about the gender roles in a balanced, traditional relationship. And you misspelled agreeing.
- before lying-in a future baby - before making a future baby

Your writing is then followed by gibberish that seems to have nothing to do with an assignment.

Well done writing a traditional take on family structure.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a funny poem about a romance.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. However, punctuation could improve the poem.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the ending surprised me.

Also, if Embe has an account here, then you can advertise her port by using the user: tag in braces.

Well done writing a fun romance poem. You could list it under comedy, too.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Tea Time  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a fabulous story about contesting gender roles.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a teacup would be great and really suit your writing.

I found you're better in "You still staying here today".

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, very. The enthusiasm really comes through.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Her Bitter Pill  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a break up. It sounds like a hard experience.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wonder if it's different to, different from, or as my American English textbooks say, different than.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a story in a poem - that's hard to do.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Scars  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You wrote a beautiful, short, poem remembering a beloved pet cat.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of your pet cat would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I could totally relate to the mixed feelings about the pawprints and the torn furniture.


Well done writing a great poem with good use of emoticons and good author's notes that are very informative.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The Start  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a poem about the struggles in life and the potential results afterwards.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the poem ends with a nice but possibly not practical wish.

Well done writing a poem that expresses your choices, and your hopes.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

You wrote a funny and dirty poem making fun of romantic poetry.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. I wonder if it shouldn't be listed under erotica?
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found although it's a spoof, it offers real insight into how relationships go.

Well done writing a fun poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem that could be a song.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I really liked the meanings in the two lines,
- swing from a rope, never
- giving up hope,

Well done writing such a nice sing-song poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)

You wrote a touching poem about infidelity and the effect it has on family members.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found this confusing:
- because of my kid's concerned looks - if kids is plural then you meant kids' .

Well done writing a moving poem that asks all the right questions.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Ahead of Dust  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a great poem that almost makes a dust allergy seem funny and cute, until the last two lines.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found your poem increased my empathy for those who suffer from dust allergies.


Well done writing on a serious topic in such a lighthearted style.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Deacon Blues  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a story (in a poem) about waving to someone at the store and feeling ignored, until the mistake is made clear.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but it isn't really an activity.
The description is great and really makes your writing clear.

I found I could relate to the experience of mistaken identity.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes, it's embarrassing.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, it's funny.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a story in a poem. That's a real challenge.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem about nature taking its time.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the stanza form interesting. You use an a/a/a/b/c/b rhyme scheme, which I haven't seen before.

Well done writing a beautiful scene.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a good short story with a surprising climax.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. I'm used to double spacing between lines of dialogue but your single spacing was okay because the lines are short.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, that's a surprise.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, it's good.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good short story from a difficult beginning.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fun story about being a forgotten bull stuck in a library.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found your story while searching for contests to enter, and your contest entry came up.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes, it's fun to imagine the bull typing with hooves.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, although how a bull got left behind is a mystery.

Well done writing a fun story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Winter.  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a short poem on the merits of winter's beauty.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I had to wonder about 'atwine' and your verb in the last line: is instead of has?

Well done writing a complete poem in 24 syllables.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a first day at kindergarten for a young bear being taught by a jaguar.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found you used the phrase "artist creations" but you meant "artistic".

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes, it's cute.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes. I especially liked how you changed the style of dialogue for each animal.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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