Chinese poetry form for Poet's Journey Workshop Lesson #8 |
Four different poems from this Chinese poetry form. http://www.101zenstories.com/index.php?story=88 VERSION 2 (Corrected versions) REDEMPTION They gather in small groups, comparing their woes, seeking solace and forgiveness in their errors of judgment. I saw some people from the rehab unit smoking cigarettes on the sidewalk. Where do the rest of us go to find redemption? STILLNESS Ideas play ping pong between deafened ears. Conversations are held without listeners. It is silent and the trees are still just after a storm. If only the trees could teach my mind about stillness. ENVY Papers, bosses, clients, and phones tug me in every direction. Today, I heard a toddler in a grocery store shout "No!". My heart was full of envy. DETERMINATION Nothing is expected from poor and troubled souls. Eager minds are dulled to fit the status quo. A yellow flower peeks through stones in a desert. Nothing on this Earth can hold down that which is determined. _________________________________________________________ Original versions below-not corrected. REDEMPTION Faults, like scarlet flags, are waved While they commune over regrets and mistakes Those in rehab gather on the front porch smoking cigarettes Where do the rest of us go to find redemption. STILLNESS Monologues short an audience Conversations without a listener It is silent and still just after a storm If only my mind knew that stillness ENVY Papers, bosses, clients, and phones Tugged me in every direction. Today, I heard a toddler in a grocery store shout "No". My heart was full of envy DETERMINATION Dismissed by negative thinkers Restricted by narrow minds A yellow flower peeks through stones in a desert Nothing on this Earth can hold down that which is determined _______________________________________________________ |