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Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the government of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.



To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Improvement in health, education and trade are is the a key factor for development of each and every single countrynation, in the world which are increasingly the most important elements for measuring every single nation's progress in any absolute sense [this is such an arduous sentence. Don't make life hard. Don't make your reader feel dizzy]. Given the circumstances of the poor nations, it is obvious that richer nations have to help poorer nationsthem to decrease alleviate the bitterly severity bad effects of their situation on their own nations. and onOn the other hand, richer nations can also help the poorer ones increase the number of opportunities for progress by absorbing attracting and using employing the talented people talents which were born in poorer countries.

To initiate this subject [you have already initiated the subject] we should consider the situation of the poorer nations that have some direct and indirect effects on the richer nationsones.  Illegal immigration to richer prosperous countries, is one of the very firstforemost and easiest decisions, which people in the poorer countries make, trying to find some better opportunitiesa window of opportunity for leading a better life. Considering their health circumstances, and financial situation,s and illegal residency, it is undeniablethey certainly that they will be doing some illegal jobs, which could be a disastercause numerous problems for richer countries in the long termrun. According to the latest statistics published by the United Nations, more than 23%  percent of the crimes in richer and consequently modern countries have been committed by illegal immigrants.

In another light, provided that richer countries invest respectable finance on in the infrastructure of the poorer indigent countries nations, they will have made could make a huge benefit by in less than very short timeno time. As said by the head ofQuoting the president of Stanford university University in the United States,:" "eachEach year, Asian students constitute about 28 percent% of the whole number of students in this university"." [I should give you guidelines about punctuation] MoreoverAlso, the more they helphelping poorer countries in the realm of trade and industry territory could facilitate, the easier they can the process of find discovering highly talentedpromising people individuals in order to work for themwho could work for them.

A ventured reason by most opponent is that, helping poor countries is a terribly wrong policy, owing toconsidering the fact that if they became powerful they would surely certainly [surely is a sentence adverb and its usage is totally different from that of "sure". Stop using "surely" this way. You could use "sure" or "certainly" here] take advantage of their situation and we had much better keep them weakwe advise against strengthening them. Nevertheless, it there is exists a misconception that should needs to be cleared up--; both short and long term [something is missing here] highly bad effects of poor countries situation, definitely outweigh the disadvantages that will surely happen [this sentence needs a complete revision].

In the endconclusion, it falls to richer nations to helping help poorer nations ones in different areas territories such as health, education, and trade, is necessary for richer countries due to the fact that it will undoubtedly have bring some long- term benefits for them, and will decrease the amount percentage of illegal poor immigrantsimmigration and its consequent devastating consequencesrepercussions.