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| Hi everyone. I just posted my book Shattered Pieces Left Behind. As it shows this is a work in progress. I did start with having it published but costs were out of my ranges. I wanted to share it here , because at least it will be read. I copied from outside and pasted it to my folder, so I have to go through to adjust any spacing issues.
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Reply| I just recalled what an English teacher explained about poetry in Quatrain, especially in Shakespeare. She said that a play with someone talking to you while just standing there would be really boring. So, each stanza of four lines is recited, then the character moves. Pacing about. It adds energy to the play., Also if the poetry is bad, it messes up the aim of the tomato throwers! (That was good teaching - that humorous bit made the lesson stick!) |
| The Lonely Tree. suggestion = This Lonely Tree Then to alter a bit into quatrain, which creates stanzas of four lines with meter and rhyme that can stand as single thoughts. Your first 4 lines are well on the way to a poem in quatrain. first four lines are metered 12, 11, 12, 11 rhyme scheme is, a b a b next four would work by changing - I'd love to invite - into = I would love you to just hang out = this makes the second stanza metered as 10, 8, 10, 8 rhyme scheme a b a b next four, first line needs 'and' = bring a book and come sit with me = ( 8 syllables) also since a tree "stands" maybe say 'sit by me' in third line drop "really" to make 8 syllables fourth line add 'is' and 'that' = That is one thing that I would never trade = (10 syllables) Now in the last stanza for the last line change ' I wish you'd ' into "Please stop by and see the sad lonely tree" maybe 'this sad lonely tree' to tie into the title "This Lonely Tree" also for the whole poem to be in quatrain, you've one line too many. (Unless like Shakespeare you can drop from quatrain into couplet, which would be to end the poem with two rhymed lines.) anyway - here it's easy, just completely drop the next to last line, which begins... They seem to be. Remember - critique is just another person's opinion - (And oh do the opinions about quatrains fill a notebook!) see keep, or can, my suggestions - foxtale |
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