That was nice.. The whole way to pieced it together, i would've thought I was there.. And actually for a minute I had forgot what you said this was about.. I was actually rooting for more drama from Jane when handling the men, but I understand it was for a 1,000 word contest that you entered.
It was also good to see that the men finally changed their views on the book toward the end.. and gave Jane her much deserved compliment..
I wish while at your luncheon she would've talked more about Mr. Darcy.. And if its true that his character was actually some what real in her own personal life.. It had been speculated that 1 of her love interest Tom lefroy, was in mind when Mr. Darcy was created.. I guess the world will never know..
I plan on walking through your port to read more of your work.. If you don't mind.
Until then Cya around
Awesome.. I was able to enter the thoughts of the guys in blue and empathize with you all (cops) for a brief, frightening moment.. I have heard that no matter how long your on the force you never become immune to it all.. And based u[on your writing you never will..
The line that was DEEP for me would have been: Some have used their own deaths to flee from them,
but most of us are scared that in causing our own death.... we'll be with them forever. Who would have taking the time to look at this in such perspective?? very deep and very touching..
You make not consider this poetry, but I will call it alot of things.. Therapeutic like you mentioned.. poetic thoughts from one whom we least expect, and my words could go on..
I'll be also waiting to see more of your work.. Until then take care.
WOW very nice.. I could feel these words as if I was the one witnessing the moment and the pain of it all.. It saddens me to see us as people be so stressed with all that goes on in our life, that we find it easier to give up than to ask for help and/or fight.. I have been there in his shoes and gave up several times.. Im just greatful that I wasn't one to succeed and have my friends, family and 2 sons asking why.. because to me that hurts more ( the question) than at time the actually act of what happened.. But unfortunately WHY? will not get answered now.. so until then just try and live you life by finding ways to avoid, remove and positively handle stress
This was a nice poem.. I am glad you asked me to check it out.. With expriencing something this painful, It delights me to see the past pain put to such beautiful array of words.. Thanks again for taking the time to review my piece, and allowing me to do the same.. please stay in touch
Now if this is in reference to 911 this was awesome piece of work.. If not then it still is great work.. To see a city abandoned the way you described is a sad vision, But when you added the poetic flow that still brought the bright side of the pale blue light you were refering to.. I enjoyed this poem.. Melancholy and rich (sad, but true)
hilarious.. With me being a bartender my was tailored towards bartending.. So I thought it was funny to read about a girl that loved to drink.. even though her puppies told her not too.. that may inspire me to do a book about a drunk girl and her puppies.. Thanks for the storyline.. Now I must find the words for it.. I will make sure I email you and dedicated that book to you and your madlib.. Thanks again
oh wow.. I must say that was one of the best wordsearches I have done since joining this site days ago.. I reall enjoyed finding a these words.. No after I have done the puzzle I have songs stuck in my head.. So after I leave I will be humming No Games and countless other..
Thanks that is just what I needed!
This really put a smile on my face.. to reminisce of some of the things people remember that I remembered.. And to also read somethings I don't remember either due to age or location especially the lettered prefix, that I do not remember.. But the Atari 2600 was one of my favorite games coming up.. As well as the penny candy.. I also always wanted to try that color shrinky thingamajig, but my mom never heard my prayers.. Dag nab it
wow I enjoyed reading this.. I must say that doing this type of poetry form takes serious creativity.. And the way the words fit and ran smoothly in the acrostic was awesome.. I felt the pain of the goodbyes and the memories that was left to ponder upon, But the ending was the completing line of it all.. Even though pain existed you made sure that moving on with good memorries and reality was better than harping on the past hurt, weary eyes and goodbyes.. and summed it up with: "Crying, I shed my last tear.
Keep moving on, the words I hear."
As the saying states.. It's better to have loved than not have loved at all..
Nice work i'll be back for more!
Nice work.. I could feel.. the kind way you let the person go.. you weren't brutal in your writing about letting love go.. like some of us have experienced.. this was a nice poem.. with out the heartache of your typical break up..
I have a song that is a favorite of mine with a particular verse that fits this poem.. "Lay me down easy, If ever you were to leave me" - Isley Brothers
You did just that
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.35 seconds at 12:20pm on Jul 02, 2024 via server web1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
