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Sushi.4 - "6" word stories. Need help. GPS!

For Sale: baby shoes, never worn ~ Hemingway

That's what a real story teller can pen!

So it's Monday and I'm desperate again! (that's why this is black and blue)

I wrote a whole bunch of "6" word stories and then pared it down to these 27. They all aren't equal! The last two times, my favorites were axed by the WDC audience , so ...

Here goes:

Da Rules

Tell me which ones tell a story. By that I mean ... does it evoke more than a poetic image? Does it create an emotion by what it says or leaves out. Could it be a prompt for a short story? This is where the on-line story-tellers can really help me! (says the poet to the novelist ...)

I'm trying to determine quality not warm fuzzies, not "oh, I love bunnies" (I'm glad you like bunnies, but is it a story?)

Strong response whether positive or negative (a laugh is great; OMG is better) is best. No response indicates that it doesn't work for you and probably won't for the folks here in Montana neither. A quizzical duh means I'm being too obscure or local.

I'll be printing up between 8 and 16 of these. So please, just tell me:

a. which ones work for you
b. which one, two or few REALLY work for you.
c. any comment you think is constructive. Last time the comments were precious.

If ye be befuddled ... see the analysis by Thomas in comments. It's just one way of sorting, but a good one.

I'll be giving out gps (unless you don't want any).

Here they are (please refer to them by number):

1. No seatbelt, Kevin learned detachment.

2. No eggs laid. Cock for dinner.

3. Petals open, name the fallen fruit.

4. Ash in jars, placed on shelves.

5. Mah Jong air-hockey; crack, dragon, bam.

6. Two-legged-goats climb though sage; cannon smoke.

7. Flags hang limp; smog chokes mountains.

8. Catch, hold, wiggle, weave. First down.

9. Listen: leaves float earthbound, geese south.

10. Potato salad, hot-dogs, Aunt Lola's laugh.

11. For rent sign; dumpster at curb.

12. Parking spaces now available September 12th.

13. Duck, duck goose; bear, buck, moose.

14. Auction: plates, quilts, two matching chairs.

15. Tulips entwined. New lambs come winter.

16. Sunflare: water seeks shelter between stones

17. Still-life with bedpans, blue blinking lights.

18. Fur lined chalice: virgin, for rent.

19. Six hands, one bottle, two blankets.

20. Sheila loved garlic. Sunny type O.

21. Trash God: coat, worn leather boots.

22. Depot, no tracks, dust from nowhere.

23. Johnny swallowed appleseeds. Orchards grow there.

24. Rain. No planting today. Farmers gossip.

25. Heron stands one-legged where ripples die.

26. Yellow rags tossed; victory in flight.

27. Pompoms stilled; tubas silent; medics midfield.