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I'm supposed to working on a new commission, and I am working on it. Here and there, a bit at a time. But I've had a strong itch recently to work on non-BoM stuff, so that's where I've been concentrating. Using writing prompts, I've been adding short stories to my WdC portfolio. And yesterday I wrote an action-cartoon script. No, it's not a "Spider-Man" script, though I am still working on that project. But it is going slowly, as I have to first outline a 13-episode arc; then outline the particular episodes; then write the scripts. In the meantime, though, I decided to have some fun with a similar but smaller project. I'm putting the SPOILER WARNING up here, in case you want to read the script before hitting the spoiler-heavy commentary track. Yes, it is in script format, though I've tried to keep it as readable as possible. I have also interrupted it in spots with embedded images taken from the original animated cartoon, with some captions. Anyway, the script takes the form of another entry in that weird fiction collection that Will finds in Blackwell's bedroom, and it starts here: "The Puppet Master Strikes!-1" ![]() So how did I come to write it? A few days ago I stumbled on an episode of the 1982 Incredible Hulk animated series: "Bruce Banner Unmasked." The Puppet Master was the villain, so, as with "Superior Spider-Man," this was a story that is right in my wheelhouse. For fun, I decided to reimagine it in a case of Let's Pretend: "Let's pretend the series' story editor handed me Michael Reaves's script and told me to revise it however I thought fit." So that's what I did. No, the Puppet Master doesn't win in the end -- there's a conventional ending -- but I had a little malign fun with it in places. Also, because it is meant to be an adaptation of a 1982 cartoon, it is intentionally much cheezier than anything I'd normally try to write. If you want to watch the original, before or after my version, you can find it on Daily Motion: "Bruce Banner Unmasked" ![]() Okay, another spoiler warning before hitting the commentary track, which follows ... Now: So, the original episode is an intersection of two plots. In the first, the Puppet Master is trying to use puppets to control both Mesa City and The Hulk; in the second, General Ross and his men are trying to discover The Hulk's identity, and they succeed! I had a real problem with the story. The first problem is that the two stories are not intrinsically related. Yes, it's the Puppet Master who causes Banner to accidentally reveal that he's the Hulk, but that's the only way they connect. Worse, neither story really develops itself. As soon as the Hulk is revealed, the Puppet Master takes control of the Army, which freezes the Hulk-identity story: Betty and the others aren't themselves, so there's no development of what happens when they learn of Banner's secret identity. And after the Puppet Master takes control of the city and army (which happens in quick order) there's his story devolves into a lot of running around and technobabble. Also, having revealed Banner's identity, the story then has to go to work finding a way to give Betty and everyone else amnesia. So I decided to start by cutting out the "revealed identity" story, and made Banner's plot a simple one: He has to sneak physical evidence linking himself to the Hulk out of the base, with the ironic disaster that, as soon as he succeeds, that evidence is seized by the Puppet Master and used in the attempt to enslave the Hulk. This required another change, one to the lore. In the Marvel universe, it is enough for the Puppet Master to make a clay likeness of his victim in order to control him. I find this too absurd even for comic book hoodoo. (Not even the excuse that the clay is "radioactive" works.) The Puppet Master is plainly using a variety of sympathetic magic, and sympathetic magic typically requires something of the victim's own in order to work. So I rewrote the lore so that the Puppet Master also requires the victim's hair be mixed with the clay. This had the added advantage of pointing to an easy "trick solution" to save the day at the end. Otherwise, most of my changes were attempts to simplify the story and give it a little more forward momentum. I made the story move toward the Puppet Master's plot to control the Hulk, instead of giving him the ability at the start, and I made it move toward his getting control of the army base instead of giving him that control in the middle. I eliminated the character of Alicia and gave her (expository) part to the character of Rio, who in the original just disappeared after being used to menace the heroes. And although Alicia has a theoretically interesting relationship to her step-father, it's a relation that isn't used to real dramatic effect in the original, and eliminating her snips off an unsatisfactory dangly bit. As a result of these simplifications, there are fewer action scenes, many of which didn't lead anywhere in the original. But I think an episode about mind-control can be forgiven for leaning a little more strongly on atmosphere than on Hulk-smashing. With fewer action scenes, I'm not certain the script would actually be long enough for a twenty-two minute action cartoon. I'm just going to pretend that with less frenetic action, there would be more time for mood and atmosphere in the chase scenes. I also added a few bits to better explain the Puppet Master's quick and far-reaching success, and some personality switching, because people seem to like that kind of perverse mind-screw. |
I'm starting a new branch today, and a commission. It starts here: Interactive: "The Unusual Suspects" ![]() Public: "The Unusual Suspects" ![]() The background: Will has made a mask and used it to copy the face and body of Maria Vasquez, cheerleader. But he has used up all his cash on supplies, and can't get further into the grimoire without a cash infusion. He could take a job at his dad's work, or show the project to a friend. But instead he has decided to break out of his social rut by showing the project to a relative stranger, and to make them a partner. But who? Today, at school, he alertly weighs some possibilities. This will be a relatively long branch—seventeen chapters, and counting—but not because it's jam-packed with incident. It's going to be fairly leisurely, because it's going to take Will out of his comfort zone and into a social world that's quite different from his usual one. |
Did yesterday's entry in the Archives edition—"Hurly-Burly" ![]() It was my turn to write a chapter for the Round Robin, and I did write it, and I was going to post it this morning. The document was opened up and I was all ready to paste it into BoM. But I've changed my mind. I'm going to leave the branch suspended with Masktrix's "Hurly-Burly" ![]() Why here, and why now? Because the chapter I wrote ended the branch. Frank and Joe came swinging in, and they not only put an end to Will and Caleb's hijinks, they took all their stuff and left our protagonists tied up in the theater without so much as an explanation of who they were or how they knew about what was going on. It was a chapter with no choices and no continuations at the bottom. Just a fat, all-caps THE END. I wasn't trying to be a jerk when I wrote it. I went round and round with myself after I got Masktrix's chapter, but I couldn't see a way not to end the branch here and in that way at. Will and Caleb had been so careless that they couldn't help turning themselves into Criminal Suspects Number One and Two for the investigating Stellae, and it would have been the easiest thing in the world for Frank and Joe to tail one of them to the theater, find the magical fire burning on stage, and drop the curtain on our protagonists. But even though I wrote and rewrote the chapter, it didn't sit well with me, and not only because I got a little pushback behind the scenes when I told the other authors what I was going to do. The logic was cold and inescapable. But I didn't want to follow thru. So I'm not going to. I'm stopping time; I'm freezing the scene with the off-age shit hurtling toward the off-page fan but not yet hitting it. Maybe someone will find a way to redirect it. Until then, I'll leave things here. * * * In the meantime, I do have a commission that I've been writing, and I can start publishing it. But I'll save that until tomorrow. |
With today's BoM chapter— Interactive: "Retrieval Mission" ![]() Public: "Retrieval Mission" ![]() —we complete one round-robin of five authors. But this isn't the end of the story. We've got one more round already written, and are working our way through a third one. Stay tuned! |
Today's chapter in The Wandering Stars—"Kenandandra Comes to Oswego" ![]() And what's up next? Well, Masktrix has launched a new branch in Book of Masks. Interactive: "A Night in the Basement" ![]() Public: "Making a Break for It" ![]() ![]() You should definitely check it out, because this one is going to be interesting. Awhile back, in a branch set at St. Xavier's, Masktrix and I wrote a storyline by batting alternate chapters back and forth between each other. We didn't have a plot in mind, nor did we have an end point. We just each wrote a chapter, sent it to the other, and waited for a new chapter to come back. It was a lot of fun, so last week I organized a bigger version of the same thing, with more authors: Masktrix, Nostrum, rugal, WordSmitty, and myself. (I invited imaj and smitch to join, but they declined.) We've got nine chapters written so far, and it's been interesting. Unpredictable. A lot of fun both to write and read. And today we're launching it. Background, so you'll know what's going on: Will Prescott has bought a book on making magical disguises, and he and his best friend, Caleb Johansson, have been playing around with it. They've made a mask of Will, and Caleb has put it on and gone back to Will's house to spend the night there while Will camps out in the basement of the old elementary school in his neighborhood. But Will was accidentally spotted by some friends of his kid brother. After running home to find Caleb, Will and Caleb are now returning to the school, and from a distance they see that the basement door is open ... Oh, and how did we settle on this area to continue? Well, Masktrix chose "Keep investigating the book" at the end of "The Fake Book"; Nostrum chose "Show the book to Caleb" at the end of "Making a Mask"; rugal chose "Test the mask on yourself" at the end of "A Conspiracy of Two"; I chose "Go along with Caleb's plan" at the end of "You Yourself and Him"; and WordSmitty chose "Try to get home without being seen" at the end of "The Two of You." Masktrix then got to figure out how to get out of the hole that Kenny had dug at the end of "Making a Break for It," and we were off. |
If you've been following me for awhile, you might be aware that I'm something of a Minecraft addict. There's just something very restful about the game -- maybe because it's a good visual/tactile distraction for me while listening to podcasts and such-like. The trouble is, I don't much like vanilla Minecraft. It's much too grindy for my tastes. So I play it with mods. Two years ago, Mojang dropped a MASSIVE update that made huge changes to the under-the-hood stuff, such that mod-makers had to reconfigure their mods from the ground up to make them compatible. The changes were so big that some of the biggest and most popular mods are only NOW getting their updates out. Only was yesterday that my personal favorite -- the Thermal Expansion series -- dropped the Beta for its mods. But now it's out. So, um, I might have harder time meeting my commitments around here for the next few days. Or weeks. Or months ... |
As foreshadowed in yesterday's post, today's chapter comes in "The Wandering Stars" ![]() ![]() There's not a lot of background, except what can be read in the chapter immediately before. In this branch, Will has only one ousiarch -- Sulva -- and is considering which of the others he might add. To help him decide, he is being given visions of alternate worlds in which he had an additional ousiarch on a recently completed mission. To it's not going to be a story so much as a series of one-off short stories. I had the idea for it a long time ago, but never wrote it. A reader commissioned me to continue, and I'm grateful for the opportunity and stimulus. |
Today's "Spider-Man" commentary (link in the commentary below) will be my last for the foreseeable future. I will have to write my "Superior Spider-Man" arc before I resume. I am ending it here though I am still two episodes short of the "Superior" starting point, and with treatments of those two episodes already written. But those two treatments—of the IRL-episodes "Brain Drain" and "The Living Brain"—formally launch the "Superior" arc by bringing Doc Ock back on-stage to execute his plan. I figure it's best, then, to save those episodes for when I start publishing my version of "Superior Spider-Man." Don't ask me when that will be. * * * In the meantime, I'll be returning to the BoM universe, this time in its sequel interactive, "The Wandering Stars" ![]() There's another storyline that may be emerging real soon, alongside whatever various solo efforts will be ongoing. It's a collaborative effort involving many of the regular contributors. It hasn't got a launch date yet, but I don't think it will be long in getting published. |
"S02E11 "The Man Behind the Mask"" ![]() |
"S02E10 "Trick or Treat"" ![]() So the only changes are: Acts I and II swap places. The character of Halloween Master is new. Hammerhead replaces Silvermane as the gangster (a change motivated by events in "S02E07 "A Game of Cops and Robbers"" ![]() |
"S02E09 "The Valley of Shadows"" ![]() In Act I, all the fighting was done by Anya Corazon in her Spider-Woman guise, with Spider-Man a helpless ping-pong ball who contributes nothing to his own survival. As I've deleted all the extra spider-people from the alternate continuity, I changed the course and climax of the fight and tried to give the series's title character more dignity while keeping the tone of Act I light. Because of those changes, I did have to invent (or at least suggest) some new business for Act I, to replace the IRL-episode's tedious grrrrl!-power bragging. Acts II and III are very close to the IRL-episode, except for the final appearance of The Master Planner and the escape of Mysterio. |
I have little to say about "S02E8 "The Shape of Things to Come"" ![]() In Part 1 of "Bad Guys," of which this treatment is a close paraphrase, the secondary villain was originally identified as Overdrive; I changed him to Molten Man because I thought that name better fit his metamorphic tech. Also, the bounty reveal scene originally occurred at the end of Act I; I thought it better to place it at the end of the episode, and to make Hippo/Panda-Mania's appearances a running gag. I also added an appearance by The Living Brain. I have to confess: I really like my title for this one. Besides the quotation of an H. G. Wells title, it alludes to Molten Man's shape-changing ability, and also warns that this episode is only a hint of the tribulations that await Spider-Man over the next half-dozen episodes. I am lousy at coming up with titles, so when I hit one I like, I get really pleased with myself. |
"S02E07 "A Game of Cops and Robbers"" ![]() A lot of sweat went into this one, and I'm not sure I like it. It feels very busy and full of double-crosses and reversals that I'm not sure work. They grow out of a need to keep Spider-Man involved in a story that really doesn't concern him, and hopping from one place to another. Is there anything of note to say? While I was still working out "S02E03 "Spider-Man Behind Bars"" ![]() I also saw a chance to bring out The Living Brain and give it more attention. |
"S02E06 "Screwball Live"" ![]() The IRL-episode contained a classic MacGuffin—a data drive—that nothing was done with. Which is okay (MacGuffin's shouldn't be made much of) but as I thought about the Kingpin episodes I wanted to write, it occurred to me that this one could trigger more than one story. In "Screwball Live" it contained information about Hammerhead's operations. But what if, instead, it contained information about Kingpin's operations? That was the seed of the idea (mentioned in earlier commentaries) that the city's other gangsters might go to war for the remnants of Kingpin's criminal empire, which in turn led to "S02E03 "Spider-Man Behind Bars"" ![]() ![]() So that was a fertile idea, but it didn't require any serious changes to the IRL-story. Yes, the contents of the drive had to be changed, but that was decoration, not a plot point. More important changes: Harry Osborn had to be removed and his role assigned to another character. I also decided to take Robbie Robertson out of The Daily Bugle and give him his own media company—another potential complication for the "Superior Spider-Man" arc. And I decided to continue giving The Living Brain some cameos, and to turn up the heat a little between Peter and Gwen. |
"S02E05 "What Dreams May Come"" ![]() ![]() My original idea—long ago—was to adapt Amazing Spider-Man #116-118, which is where Richard Raleigh originally appeared, but I had the hardest time coming up with an adapted plot that left him alive at the end, ready for more mayhem (perhaps) in the "Superior Spider-Man" arc. (One of my biggest peeves about the IRL-series was that it eliminated so many villains for Ock/Spider-Man to battle. I wasn't going to make the same mistake for my version.) In addition, he had last been seen as the new headmaster for AIM's Bilderburg Academy, a position that would have no really good connection with a race for the mayoralty. Finally, Raleigh had been introduced in "S01E04 "Ring Around the Spider-Man"" ![]() Then, serendipity. I started watching online clips of the HBO miniseries Chernobyl. And it came to me in a flash. Literally, in the space of about five seconds. Raleigh is building the mystical equivalent of a nuclear reactor, and it goes horribly wrong. He's at Bilderburg because his design requires a merger of the magical and the scientific, and that cuneiform tablet he stole in "Ring Around the Spider-Man" is the key to it. Magic implies the presence of Doctor Strange, so I did a little reading up on that character, and came up with the idea of the Nightmare Portal as the Chernobyl equivalent. Then it was only (only! yeah, right) a matter of inventing the right pieces and putting them together so that they would connect backward to "S02E03 "Spider-Man Behind Bars"" ![]() And as I worked, other ideas began to click into place. At first Mysterio was going to be involved, but I that was too complicated. Instead, one of the most haunting images of Chernobyl—men looking into the open reactor core, and turning back around with scarred faces—gave me the image of someone looking into the open portal and having his face melt off, which gave me the origin for a character that the IRL-series introduces deeper in Season Two. I also came up with a place to park Spencer Smythe for later mischief. In this way, "What Dreams May Come" became the pivot around which the first half of Season Two turned. |
"S02E04 "Black Cats and Crossed Paths"" ![]() First, in the IRL-series's Season One, Peter has a kind of janitorial job at Horizon, and the theft occurred as he was cleaning up Max's office. So I had to alter the circumstances of the theft. Next, I added a running gag/sub-plot about J. Jonah Jameson. It just seemed to me that the story needed a little more structure to it. It also made Peter's string of "bad luck" a little more stark, because Jameson is exactly the wrong person he should be colliding with when things go badly. But mostly I just thought it was a funny idea. I also added Master Planner's appearance at the end. And I changed the title. The IRL-episode had as its conceit that this was a "typical day" in the life of Peter Parker, with Black Cat's antics interrupting his classes and his time with friends. I got rid of that, and so the original title didn't fit it anymore. I placed the episode here, immediately after "S02E03 "Spider-Man Behind Bars"" ![]() |
"S02E03 "Spider-Man Behind Bars"" ![]() To fill out the 13-episode stretch that precedes the start of the "Superior Spider-Man" arc, I used IRL-episodes where I could, but there were three slots where I had to come up with something new. That was fine, for it would give me a chance to develop villains for later use. I knew I wanted episodes centered on Kingpin and Richard Raleigh, for these were characters that had been introduced in Season One but not gotten much development. I had established that there was bad blood between them, though, and so my mind turned toward making a two-part episode that pitted them against each other. I came up with Part Two first—the climax, showing their fight and the fall of the Kingpin. But before I could come up with Part One, I got the idea for a Part Three: the aftermath of the Kingpin's fall as rival gangs fought for control of his territory and resources. A good fight needs a concrete goal, however, so I settled on the idea that they would be fighting for control of Kingpin's armory, with all its valuable gear. (In Season One I had Kingpin showing a special avidity for supervillain gear.) That would also need to be set up. So with Parts Two and Three in mind I worked backwards to Part One, which would set up elements of the two sequels. First, it would show Kingpin acquiring the greatest pile of supervillain loot imaginable, so that his rivals would have a strong motive to fight for the gear. Second, it would end with a crisis that would force Kingpin into fighting Richard Raleigh, where Kingpin would fall. To fill the idea out I ransacked back issues of Amazing Spider-Man and found the idea of a prison break from #65. To instigate the plot, and to spin it around so it would link up with Part Two, I seized on the character of Leonard Owlsley, who would betray Kingpin to Raleigh. I also thought might then turn up again as a gangster in the "Superior Spider-Man" arc. The Beetle also makes an appearance, in order to set up a later cameo taken over from the IRL-series. |
Those of you who know the IRL-series will recognize the events of "S02E02 "Between an Ock and a Hard Place"" ![]() All of this (as I've explained repeatedly) is intended to lead up to my version of the "Superior Spider-Man" arc, where Ock and Spider-Man swap bodies. This is where the story starts moving in that direction, so if you haven't been paying attention up to now, this is where you might start. |
My Season Two opener, "S02E01 "How I Spent My Summer Vacation"" ![]() All of my changes are motivated by changes to the first-season continuity, or else I would have lifted the IRL-episode wholesale and dropped it into my continuity. Though no great shakes, it is competent filler. As for the change in the title: It turns out that "How I Thwipped My Summer Vacation" is too long for the WdC title box when the season/episode number is included. That's okay. It gave me an excuse to change a title that I didn't like anyway. |
Today, as part of my silly Spider-Man project, I posted Part 3 of the three-episode Season One finale. Tomorrow, I'll be posting Episode 1 of Season Two. In the meantime I can brag that I've finally reached the end of Phase One. My plan (to reiterate) is to compose my own version of the comic's "Superior Spider-Man" arc without seeing how the IRL-series did it. But because I was dissatisfied with the way the IRL-series set up characters and conflicts and histories, I decided to make my own continuity. So, starting from Season 1, Episode 1, I've been writing detailed treatments of my own version of the series. I started the project a year ago, and after long stops and short starts, I have now finished all that prep work. I now have treatments for twenty-five Season One episodes, and treatments for thirteen Season Two episodes. I have brought my series up to the point where the "Superior Spider-Man" arc can start. And that's where I'm going to leave it for a bit. I'm pooped. Episodes 1 through 13 will appear one day at a time over the next, um, thirteen days, but I'm going to go back to BoM while that's happening. I won't resume publishing until Masktrix finishes the 15-chapter arc I commissioned from him, but between now and then I'll be working on new things in the BoM universe. I've accepted a commission to write some chapters in "The Wandering Stars"; after that I'll probably do something for myself. And then we'll see. Right now, though, I want to crawl into a hole and sleep. The last three days in particular have been grueling, as I've clambered toward the end. There is a novel's worth of words in this project, and right now I feel like every single one of them was a punch to my rib cage. |