People wish the dead could return because they miss them so much. You knew that, I'm just making an obvious statement saying that. I agree with you though, I seriously doubt the dead wish to return. They're in another place, another existence, with no desire to be back with us. They are probably having too much fun also. Fun, in a different way though, not fun as you and I know it.
Thanks WebWiԎch is Thankful and StephBee (bravehearts both) - I hope Jimmy is a legit suspect, I've had him aid and abet you there!
Prompt is too long for my myopic eyes to plod though, so just picked a name I saw!
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THE POEM
The poem talks about how a mountain can challenge us.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the positive message of the mountain. Some people may think of mountains as hard to overcome, but if one buckles down and puts their mind to it, they overcome any mountain that's in their way.
STRUCTURE
This is a diamante poem. The rules involve having 7 seven lines, first and last line, just one word which is a noun, 2nd and 6th lines, 2 words which are adjectives, 3rd and 5th lines have 3 words which are verbs, 4th line has 4 words - nouns. Diamantes don't have to play hard by the rules, but they should take the shape of a diamond.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC.
DESCRIPTIONS
The descriptive words blend in words you expect to find like "massive" and "unsurmountable," but also those words associated with emotional mountains like "anxiety" "resolve," and I really enjoyed how the poet made the subtle connection there with the physical and the emotional.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening sets the stage for the poem. I enjoyed the emotional approach to the poem - it helped to make it personal. The poem followed the prompt and used one of the following words: mountain, beach, or forest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
I wish I could express myself the way she does. Over the years, I haven't been able to tell one or two guys my feelings for them - I guess I'm too scared of rejection and spoiling a friendship. The only relationship I had was 'arranged'. I was engaged to the guy for six months till he broke it off suddenly on his mother's orders. I heard, from a mutual friend, that he cried a lot after that.
Anyway, I've always felt inadequate as a woman because I haven't had a proper relationship. I know I don't need validation - blah blah - at an intellectual level, but not at an emotional level. It doesn't help that the airwaves are full of messages like 'you're nobody till somebody loves you'. They mean romantic love - and in this case, I'm nobody.
This song just made me think that maybe if I could express myself better things would be different.
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