First, its a good story with a decent plot. I suggest you make a space between the lines so it is easier to read.
Second, I am glad that you placed in the rules that it is an 'authors only' story However, I suggest you state 'please do not add' so others (mostly kids) will clearly understand and follow your request.
Finally, It might be interesting to create an identical story with options left open for others to work with so to give you a source of new ideas, things you may never have thought of. (just an idea)
I wish you all the luck. I will type a review of the story shortly.
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