Writing questions and answers

I need help. I really enjoy writing! Currently I am working on a manuscript, I would really like to get some feedback on it. Apparently I have trouble with grammar and punctuation. When I write I use Microsoft Word, and I use the grammar and spell check. when I come up on fragmented sentences I fix them. Yet when I show my work to professional freelance editors they tell that it needs a lot of work in this area. My goal for this manuscript is to finish it be the end of January, have it edited and published with create Space by April. I have two chapters of this story posted "Henry Porter"