October Novel Prep Challenge

I had to back up just a bit and redo my premise. I did so so help me flesh out my outline a bit better. Please tell me what you think. OK? Be honest.
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My Premise:

Daved Wolfe is an alcoholic, guilt-ridden lawman with a hardened heart. On Christmas Eve he receives a mysterious note about his wife’s death and threats to more lives. Daved must face his fears, the course of actions of his past, and the daunting future his actions would lead to unless he learns the truth and stops this serial killer.

Kristina

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