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You did mention in your first post 'computer-assisted', though.

Look, there are a number of reviewers here who go for quantity over quality, and do not mention much at all that is genuinely helpful. Fluff pieces. They follow a template and have similar wording because, when you churn out that many reviews, there are only so many words and phrases to use. Are these reviews any good? That is entirely in the eye of the receiver. While I get little out of them personally, at least I know someone has read my work, and that is all I care about.

As for your own work, I had a quick look at your port, and, truth be told, the work is quite long for someone to just sit down and review for what will end up very little reward. If I might offer some advice, you have edit points throughout - break the work into smaller pieces, call them 'Part 1', 'Part 2' etc., and that way a reviewer might be more inclined to have a look. Getting credited for reviewing a number of parts instead of one large piece could incentivise the reviewerrs.

And a quick thing - look at your punctuation around direct speech. Just saying.