Hello, just to let you know I'm not a professional, just a writer like you.
OVERALL SENSE
I could envision her sitting on the porch as he was watching her. I could vividly picture her throwing her painting stuff out the window, I felt like I was part of the story most of the time. The names added to the story, by creating a sense of being in a different country, without you having to say she was. A real delight to read.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There was a few spots that the words didn't get spaced apart.
AREAS OF IMPROVEMENT
The moment you switched who was telling the story, it took me a few tries to get back into the story, but I did. This needs a smoother transition so as not to lose your reader.
drawing pencils, you mention drawing pencils, then by the ending of the paragraph it was her paints. This got a little confusing. I could still picture it, but wasn't sure which the brother had messed with.
Thank you for writing and posting this, I enjoyed being in that world you had created. Mystic Angel