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 She Closes Her Eyes Open in new Window. [E]
Just a mood I had one night, and this is what came from it
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" Open in new Window.! for better rhythm, I'd remove 'then' "s and then opens them"
Suggestion: try "Closing her eyes, she..." rather than "she closed her eyes"; for smoother sound

Great idea and message for a poem. Well done.

Welcome to WDC; It's a great place to improve one's own writing while enjoying new friendships with writers. ANn
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