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 Nothing Matters but Survival Open in new Window. [E]
A story told from two points of view
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" Open in new Window.!better if you change 'the man', to "He was" ed. The man, caught"
If you do that, it lets the reader fill in 'the man' and make the story smoother as the surprise is given. The reader will still understand.

I loved this; the same situation from two points of view is powerful and gives the final line greater depth in meaning. Wonderful.

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