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 | Woodland Encounter  [13+] An encounter in the woods. Honorable Mention in Separate Worlds Contest for August 2012  |
| (4.0)   HI DyrHearte! I am happy to do a review with to celebrate you! This is an enchanting story with a twist. In the beginning I thought the main character would meet an elf or fairy creature but didn't expect the kind of encounter he had. You said "she wasn't all human" which I thought was odd as we thought she was an elf kind. This implies a hybrid mix. I wanted to say "at all human" but..mm? Or maybe she was a human so used to living in the forest. The descriptions were detailed and made for vivid visuals in the forest, the chamelon aspect and the attack. The Point of view of the main character was consistent and we get a great deal about him from his inner thoughts during the escapade. That the knife and beauty of the girl held him captive is effective contrast. Interesting he gave the bird a personality by saying "curiously looked down..and laughed". I liked the fey creature and her mystical magic, like appearing and mind reading. She did everything without speaking. She is still a mystery. The line where he mentions paying for his curiousity feels like a message. I was thrown out abit with the phrase "on the way to a far sea". I didn't see the point of it as we are focusing on him drinking .It just struck me oddly. There could be a lot more to the story in a sequel. You did a good job fo building a world without actually saying where it was--the outfits, nature, forest, drinking from stream, gold pouch, dagger, fey energy all serve to give us a sense of place and old time.  Thanks for this entertaining and evocative expression!  Light on the path as you write on! ** Image ID #1919873 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 05/30/2014 @ 8:19pm EDT