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*Sun**BalloonP*HI dragonwoman ! I am happy to do a review with to celebrate you!*Delight*

I found this evocative title on the Daily Flash Contest page! The topic appealed to me.

The opening line had a great hook in the idea of a coming emergency and I liked the idea that there was legend about the Wave! It adds to the drama and leads us to know that it has happened before as tsunami do.
I notice this line ends in a prepostion "of".

You add to the msytery when you say all the elder female disappeared and i started to ponder why would they disappear because of this? Sugar intolerance.? *Wink* You give us no hints to what the weave is but do hint may not be water if you need guile to survive.

The details in next paragraphs was vivid as you set us up for the twist! I had to laugh at the end. What a sensational idea and play on the word "Wave"!

I wanted to drop the word "Suddenly" to give the potency to "A pounding.." She is aready hearing it coming.

You did a good job leading me on and keeping wondering what on earth this wave was. And all in 300 words! Wow! *Starstruck*
Thanks for the entertainment.



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