Hi there! "Gasp!" You are being reviewed by a newbie!

Personal Impression: I found this to be dark and depressing, but I think you were going for that. It sounded more like a letter to yourself than a poem, but some poems are letters to ourselves so, I wouldn't worry about it much. It needs a little work. Fewer words with more of an impact. It has great meaning, but it could have such a more impact with fewer words if you work on it a bit more.

Tone & Mood: Mood is a little sad and depressing and the tone is good and solid.

Emotional Impact: It has a very worrying effect on people. Worry for you and pity. I prayed this isn't really about you and just about someone you know or just your imagination.It brings out emotion, but poems are suppose to bring out emotion..

Grammar/Punctuation: You did an excellent job with this. I see these problems.
Could it be an annoy face? (should be "annoyed")
Would the people whom I loved dearly left me alone, confused in this creepy world? (should be " leave me alone")
But I always ended up behaved in poor manners, (doesn't make sense)

Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this poem. Please keep on writing more poems just like this!