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| Hello, Elle  ! This is review number one of three for your recent win in "Invalid Item"  . Thank you for sharing your poem, "Invalid Item" with us and giving me this opportunity to review. Remember that the following is just the personal opinion of one reader. I am not a professional and you know your work best. If you find something helpful here, feel free to use it. If you don't, discard it completely.   First ImpressionsWhat a nice poem, Elle! This one hits the spot, fulfilling all of the Scottish stereotypes I have in my mind. I guess what they say about Scotland is true! I'd love to visit sometime because it sounds like a beautiful place. I think the title you chose for this piece is excellent because it fits so well with the content.  What I likedMy favorite part about this poem is that you built such an image in my head. You hit all the senses perfectly. The sights of the hills and castles are vividly described. The smell of the malted whiskey being carried through the breeze only builds to the scene in my mind. I love the feeling of experiencing something I haven't experienced just because a writer described it so well, and that's the feeling I get with this poem. My favorite part was the last line. It ends on such a strong note with, "...and Scotland's heart beats fiercely to the bagpipe's droning cries."  What Could Use WorkI read about Triolets, thank you for the link on that one because I wouldn't have known what it was otherwise. I was wondering why the lines kept ending with the word "hills".  After looking at the link, it seems you've followed all of the rules of that poetry type. I don't see any issues with punctuation or grammar either. Everything looks good here!  SummaryI enjoyed reading this poem and getting a glimpse into some of the things you saw in Scotland. You definitely make it sound like an interesting and fun place to visit. It doesn't matter how well you describe it, I'd still like to see it for myself! Thanks again for sharing with us. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 08/03/2014 @ 6:55pm EDT