Hello Don't Care . How are you doing? My name's Charlie and I'm here to welcome you to WDC with a review of your 100 word story, "Knock before entering" . Thanks for sharing your work with us and giving us a chance to review. Let me know if you need help around the site.

I would have officially freaked out in this situation! I am terrified of bees. I know they're needed and that's all fine and dandy, but if I so much as hear one buzzing around me, I run away. I had a bee experience with my cousin one time. He was up in a tree and he asked me to throw something up to him, so I did... and I hit a beehive with it. We both got stung three or four times and I've had a cemented fear ever since!

Writing stories in so few words is difficult because you can't really build much with the characters or the storyline. You have to be quick about it, and I think you did a good job of getting the story out there with the little space that you did have. It's a good thing you were able to get out without getting stung, amazing really.

I didn't understand this part at all:

We tip the behemoth, beneath, barren ground emphasizes a quarter sized hole.

I pretty much just don't know what that means. I know it's central to the story, but I've read it three or four times and I can't work out what's being said. "The behemoth, beneath, barren ground emphasizes a quarter sized hole"? I think there might be an error there or it might just need to be revised to make it more clear what's happening. Thanks again for sharing with us!




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .