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 No Brownies Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
I was wondering where this conversation was going and you didn't disappoint.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The conversation played out well as one person relayed the day's events to another and the added humor at the end was great.

PLOT~
One sibling can't wait to tell the other what happened when their mother went to the grocery store. The one listening to it all has questions galore and their sibling is only too happy to keep explaining it all.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Hearing about their mother's heroics leads to an interesting conversation between two siblings. It was like being a fly on the wall.

DIALOG~
You managed to create a gripping dialog only entry for the Daily Flash. I kept wondering what the brownies had to do with anything, but as the story unfolded it seems the brownies had everything to do with it. The dialog worked really well for this purpose of telling this story of their mother and what happened to her that day. I could picture that scene of the siblings, one being in the know, the other trying to understand what had happened. I loved that after the mom saves the day, she still forgot the cocoa for the brownies, which she went to the store in the first place to get.

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