Hi Luckie,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the homeless man will steal from the store. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a homeless man who is contemplating shoplifting in order to eat witnesses a robbery. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The cashier speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.