Hi Mr. Midnight , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.


On Title/Subject
Very interesting and adequate title for this chapter. And what content. I was flabergasted about this one. Very exciting.

General impressions
Wow, great, great chapter. I was totally into this chapter. Psychology played an important role in this chapter that is now becoming a real adventure. I really loved the interaction between Mr. Takahashi and Peter and I am in awe about the questions and answers. Real-life. The dialogs are superb. I am sitting on the edge of my chair reading this.

Favorite Parts
"Imagine what? Mr. Takahashi, are you s***tin' me? There is no mess of shapes. It looks like ... it looks like part of a map."
"You ... see a map?" his eyes widened and he leaned forward in his chair. "A map?"
"You're kidding me right?" Peter walked up to the projection on the wall so that he could point at what he was seeing.


I suppose a very important find in the story.

Suggestions
No suggestions at all other than that this chapter should be exemplarily for your whole novel. This level of psychology, dialog, pace, and flow. Very well done! Very thrilling and exciting.

Final thoughts
What a great chapter. You really know how to add suspense by intelligent and psychologically sound content. I want to read on.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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