Hi lezismore-moreislez .

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Plastics of Bottlelnd" .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

  Overall Impression. Your author's note at the beginning of your offering stated this was an early attempt for you. I thought it pretty good, and a great start for a children's story. You wrote an easy to understand, easy to read tale that is great for children.

I wonder if you continued in that vein. It has a great moral for us all.

Actually, I noticed you haven't been back here for several months. I hope you return soon.

  Technical and Editorial Considerations. I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing here--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

          Your opening sentence doesn't need a comma in it. The two phrases are necessary for each other.    

          Your final sentence would be stronger if you divided it into two sentences with the final sentence as its own paragraph. For example:

 And to this day you will find both plastic and glass bottles sitting side by side in every store you visit.

Of course the cans still keep their distance. 

My Rating.  4.5. 

Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.{/left}



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .