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 Over My Dead Body Open in new Window. [E]
Mom muttered these words once too often.
by Maid of the Mist Most Macabre Author Icon
Review of Over My Dead Body  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Maid of the Mist Most Macabre! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window..

*Reading* From a woman who loves to speak in cliche sentences, leaves her last cliche on her own tombstone. The narrator, her child reflects back at the many different cliches spoken over the years from her mother. But even she is not expecting the words inscribed on her tombstone.

Title and Description - You title grabbed my attention and your description urged me to read on.

Character - The daughter's emotions come through loud and clear with your words. Her sadness is palpable over the loss of her mother.

Setting - The setting is an intimate one of mom and daughter. Both before the mom passed, and after.

What I Liked Best - The revealing of the tombstone. *Laugh*

Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookstack3* I heard her gasps for air.

I heard her gasp for air.

*Peng* to my Mother she

Comma needed after Mother

*Notepady* and allergy

Comma needed after allergy

*Pencil* over night

overnight

*Books4* current tragedy,

No comma needed.

*Peng* finger nails

fingernails

*Tackr* once believe

once believed

*Bookopen* Yes please.

Comma after Yes

*Penr* Finally the moment

Comma after Finally

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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