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 Baking a Cake: An Expert Is Pumped Open in new Window. [E]
A purpose filled with pride & status must stay real to be truly blessed with time - a poem
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Review by SandraLynn Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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"Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: baking a Cake: An Expert Is Pumped
First Impression: Who does not like Cake? Not me, that's for sure. Your poem title intrigued me and drew me in to peruse your writing. I am not sure I would think of minuses with baking, but there are certainly definite pluses. Yes, the smell makes the anticipation of sampling difficult. baking is indeed a process, from start to finish.
What needs your attention: I find no fault with your spelling. Congrats! This is just my perception, but the final stanza is confusing. To me the wording seems awkward. I am an avid baker and I suppose I have never considered baking to be gamesmanship. Mentioning an edge and a ledge makes no sense to me.
What part I liked best: I liked and can relate to spatters and scatter. baking is possibly messy. Yes, I agree, "ingredients make batter." I also like the term " dessert geniuses." "Their gems seem extraordinary." Some bakers do indeed possess the magic. I also agree that mistakes do happen and they are no reason "to have a coronary." Even the mistakes are usually still edible, not perfect, but tasty still the same.
Overall Impression: I cannot fault a poem touting the wonders of baking. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.
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