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 The Wisp Open in new Window. [13+]
Something very strange 'lives' in the marsh...
by f.x.keenan Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I think it was the way you told this story, in first person and quite matter of fact, that made it so unsettling. You built the tension very carefully, and at first, the narrator was convinced that the light was just a natural phenomenon. The readers, knowing better, expect something untoward to happen, and soon enough, you turn up the suspense. I liked that the descriptions were enough to show the readers the scene and what had happened, but they weren’t graphic - you hint at what the narrator had done, which means the events take place in the reader’s mind.

It was easy to imagine the setting, and the narrator, a college professor who had a breakdown and decided to live alone in the wilderness, was very likeable and remained so throughout the story. After all, the crimes he committed weren’t his fault; he barely even remembered them, and he considered turning himself in. He didn’t have a choice in the matter though, and you left the ending open, hinting that he would commit more evil deeds.


*PenG* Suggestions:

I noticed a few small errors:

so removed in it's way
You need “its” without the apostrophe.

with a small fires
“with a small fire” or “with small fires”

which I assumed it to be
“which I assumed to be”


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I think you have a great story here. I’m not usually a fan of horror - I’ve read too many stories that relied on gore and didn’t have much substance, but this tale was very well constructed and genuinely creepy, and I enjoyed the read.




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