Okay. Let's take a look. You have a person walking down along the beach, enjoying the view. At the same time, you also have an Air Force pilot preparing to stop what might be an attempt to invade the planet. One would hope that he'd either win, or that it was a false alarm. One would hope.....

Characters
The characters could be described better, and it feels like someone is missing.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any issues with spelling or grammar.

Suggestion
So far, Benny doesn't seem relevant to the plot, in any shape or form. His section could be cut out with no issues, or set aside until later, and make Fowler seem like he's the main person, until he's revealed to be a decoy or something. Likewise, if things need to be the way they are, perhaps we could introduce a third point-of-view, that of an alien on the invasion fleet or something.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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