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 Growing up   [E]
Flying in the wind, the seed thought itsee me with my greenery and beauty.
by Azot
Review of Growing up  
Review by JACE
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Azot .

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Growing up " .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. First, congrats on recently joining Writing.Com. Looking at your Biography tab you have a couple areas filled out with another language. If English is not your primary language, I say great job with your offering.

And on that subject, your story offers sage advice about growing up. How often folks change to become what others think we should be. In this case, the seed, and by extension, a person evolves into what he or she should be through external forces.

The best of intentions can fall by the wayside when continually beat down by these forces. It's a sad state of affairs.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* May I offer you some advice about posting stories on WDC? The trick is to entice folks into reading your offering. Making it easier for them does just that. One thing you can do is double-space your paragraphs. The added white space makes it easier to read from a computer screen, or a smaller phone screen.

         *Bullet* Also, making your font size just a little larger (by using the edit icons at the top of the text box) makes reading easier.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5.  I wish you luck in all your writing endeavors.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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