Hi Cian,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader knows you are thanking someone but not who or what for. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written a letter to the StoryMistress thanking her for creating this site and telling her what the site has done for you. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a wrier. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.