Hi Darkscape Entertainment,


This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens as Alex and Karen get ready for the day. The reader is wondering what the day will hold for the two of them and will read on to find out. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. It looks like Karen is inexplicably calm about the disappearance of three people they care about. The reader is anxious to find out why. the dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.