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   |  | ruwth is writing...  [18+] I will be adding stories & reflections as time marches on. Take a gander today!  |
| (4.5)| Hi ruwth . I'm Jace, and it's my distinct pleasure to read and comment on your offering "~ My Plans As A Writer ~" from your Book item: "ruwth is writing..." for the "I Write in 2024" .  Overall Impression. Thank you for participating in this "I Write in 24" activity. I love the fact that I get to read so many different authors and their work.You chose to base this essay on a prompt from "Blog Week Birthday Bastion 2024" during the Writing.Com 24th Birthday celebration, including your plans and aspirations as a writer. Reading your essay reminded me of an anecdote I learned while at the U.S. Army's Defense Information School. When preparing a lecture for a class, or just writing an article, the premise to follow is: Tell your audience what you're going to tell them, tell them what you want them to know, and then tell them what you told them. Perhaps it was your various headings that brought this to mind. I thought the headings helped clarify the points you were trying to make. However, I would consider changing your first header to "It Starts". None of your other headers are past tense. You have a style of writing that's fairly easy to read. But you use extra wording that's unnecessary. You can easily say what you want with fewer words. For example, you wrote: ... my physical health problems prevented me from being able to work. Consider this: ... my physical health problems prevented me from working. In that example, you already mentioned health in the previous sentence. A careful read will reveal other wordy examples. You begin with deciding what to do with your life--writing. Now what should you write about? Section two tells us where some of those places and jobs from which ideas might come. Also, in this section, you use 'had (verb)' a number of times. Consider deleting the word 'had'. Then doubt crept in. You felt inadequate, without any technical training to write. You needed help. Lo and behold, a Google search turned up Writing.Com. Here's the help and support you needed to begin writing. Personally, I believe anyone who has had schooling beyond the 8th grade can write. Perhaps not well at first. But writing, like any avocation, takes time and practice to succeed. WDC helped with support and provided a measure of success. Building on that success was the next obvious step. It looks like you have the strength and skill to get published. Don't over-think things. The learning curve to achieve perfection can never be fulfilled. At some point you have to take a leap of faith and submit your polished article for publication. Now, go and set the date for your submission.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. Other than the technical aspects cited above, I found no other issues with your punctuation and writing. One tense change to note: I had earn my Bachelor of Science in Nursing. Change 'earn' to 'earned'.  My Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
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