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 Best Christmas Ever Open in new Window. [E]
Flash Fiction
by Jacky Author Icon
Review by Annette Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Jacky Author Icon,

I am here with a review for your holiday themed story because I am taking part in "12 Days Of Christmas 2024Open in new Window..

This was a fun read. I started guessing that Alex and Randy weren't kids or people when the window well was mentioned the first time. I like that you only gave away what they really are at the very end. Even if it was somewhat expected.

Three pounds! *Mindblown* That's a lot. Of course, it works for this kind of over the top story. It would be unusual for the likes of Alex and Randy to come up with a whole operation in which they empty out a kitchen worth of cookie racks.

There was one ending quotation mark missing:

“I think it’s amazing! Let’s get some before they come home!" They gathered and ran in and out several times.

Keep writing.

Annette
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