Poem about a walk on the beach and the light reflecting off Mars. Please critique. |
Ocean Poem Robert Deimel Twinkling ray of pinkish light Far above this ominous sea; Deeply set in leaded sky you beckon, calling out to me. Do you know about the waves that tease this eerie darkened shore? Could you know about my hopes which now I fear may be no more? Tiny rays with reddish hue outstanding in this cloud-tossed sky; You would pierce through time and space to reach a mortal such as I? And what distance, and what cold could not conspire in that dark sea of empty, godforsaken space to turn your course away from me? And what passion, or what power would fuel your interstellar flight And guide you all the way from Mars to reach me here this moonlight night? Distant planet, tinged with red across our starry galaxy; Your light has come this far by chance — a stellar serendipity? Or could it be, as I might guess, Your journey to this moonlit shore Was no more chance, nor blithe caprice than all the goals I'm striving for. Twinkling ray of pinkish light, cloud-tossed sky and wind-swept sea; Woman, gently takes my hand, my blessings shower over me! |