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Review of Heat Rises  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing your story.
*FlowerB* Wow. The imagery that you paint with your words is vivid. I can see each scene as you describe it. I can feel the numbness that goes with losing a loved one. No anger, no resignation, no bartering - just numbness. It was almost like being on auto-pilot. The random thought of the puppy just added to the "human-ness" of the story. And it was fitting that the funeral ended with the drops of rain beginning to fall. It was also human to blame herself for wanting ice cream. The "pissiness" and the lack of eye contact. It comes with being human. You made this story very human and touching.

*Flowerw*The flow of the story was smooth and easy to read and understand. I saw no typos or grammar issues in the story to distract the reader. Well written and executed.

*FlowerY*This is a tough subject to write about. While I know death touches everyone at one time or another, I hope this wasn't something you've had to experience.

*FlowerR* Overall, an excellent work. Vivid imagery and feeling throughout the story. I enjoyed reading it, even though a sad subject. Keep up the great job!



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Review of The Steel Dragon  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Anchor* Thank you for sharing this poem. I liked that you told what form you were using. Suggestion: maybe give a footnote what a Rondeau is...for us poetry newbies?)

*Anchor*Emphasis is on "And the Steel Dragon sank". A dark poem, about a shipping tragedy. The Great Lakes are notorious for the ships and lives that they have claimed. The fall season is especially treacherous on the Great Lakes. They aren't called "inland seas" for nothing! It is sad that all that remains of that grand old ship is part of the rudder and a statue that stands in the Mariner's Hall.

*Anchor*You followed the format of the poem (I looked it up), and I see no grammatical issues or typos to distract from the story you've told in the poem. The picture next to the title is appropriate for the poem. You've done an excellent job telling the story.

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Review of Death Knocks  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this.

*PoseyP* It is a sobering poem. It is also reality. Death is something we all have in common. A thought-provoking sentiment.

*PoseyB* I like the comparison you use for the funeral service. "masks", words "spoken in vain", and "nothing sweet in this cup".

*Poseyo*The most powerful line is the last one, where you compare the loss to a "brush fire", and the condolences as a "feeble rain"

*PoseyV* I saw no typos or grammar issues with this writing. Very gripping and thoughtfully written about so painful a subject.

Keep up the good job...I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review of Breaking Yoke  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very clever twist on the nursery rhyme "Humpty Dumpty". The flow and rhyme is smooth, and I saw no typo or grammar issues to detract from the poem. It is funny how twisted this is...while in the standard nursery rhyme, the kings men tried to put him together again. In this version, just the opposite. Question: where were the king's horses? LOL Well done!

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Review of The Small Print  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great job! A very good lesson to be learned. Even though the "red flags" were there, still, it is easy to get sucked into the "chapter headings and climaxes" as you put it succinctly. I like the comparing that you do - relationship to a "who-done-it" where you know the ending. Bravo! I enjoyed reading this very much. No grammar or typos that I noticed. Keep on Writing!

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Review of friEnd  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome to Writing.Com. I hope you are making yourself to "home" here. Just jump right in. Don't be afraid to ask questions. The folks here are friendly and encouraging. I'm reviewing your poem today. *Smile*

Nicely written! I like how the highlighted words made up the theme of the poem. Very creative. Is there a format for this style poem or is it free verse? Kind of sad, but it is powerful. No typos or grammar "thingys" to detract from your work. Keep up the good work!

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Review of The Maybe's  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A sobering tale (pardon the pun). A sad and serious subject...Drinking and driving. Vivid imagery.
One suggestion to make it flow better: (take it for what is is worth)

Told her to come back, come and play the game

perhaps (Telling her to come back and play the game ?)

A chilling lesson in this poem. Thank you for sharing.

As always my friend, Keep Writing!

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amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Too funny! Things happen. An amusing story that caught my attention. I can relate, as I've been a cashier, and misunderstandings occur. A quick read, kind of like a "Reader's Digest" entry. No typos or grammar issues that I spotted. Keep up the good job!

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Review of June 7--Dragon  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Wow...did not see that coming! I have goose-bumps still after reading this. Very much "X-files" meet a dark fantasy! Dark, engrossing imagery. Tension builds and then a twisted conclusion. I would have guessed this was the beginning of a thriller novel. You definitely caught my attention. No grammar issues or typos that I could see. Keep up the great job, and I look forward to reading more of your work!

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Review of The Music Man  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A wonderful story in poetry. Thank you for sharing this. Your word painted a vivid picture - from the frail old man, to the seemingly ageless man who played his instruments with abandon. Then just as the spell started, it stopped, and the old man on his cane returned. I enjoyed reading the poem from beginning to end. I also liked how the narrator begged for just "one more song". I always look forward to reading your works. Great Job - as always.

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Review of Highway of Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this poem. I liked how it followed the ABCs. It must have taken a lot of thought to accomplish. Great flow, only a couple lines gave me pause at first, but reading it the second time was much better. I am inspired to write more poetry, and am having a good time with it. Participating in your forum has been educational as well. I think I am finding my "niche" LOL. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you so very much!

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Review of Summer Solstice  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the format of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and thank you for describing how the Pi format works. I like the comparisons between the seasons and civilization. Yet through it all, the "Sun stands still!" No grammar or typo issues here. Easy to read, and flows smoothly. Keep up the great job!

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Review of Roads Of Gold  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Another bit of wisdom well shared. It's a shame that people think if you don't believe what they do, that you are doomed. It's also a shame to watch them stumble upon those "streets of gold". Heck, even Jesus walked the dirty, dusty roads of his day, where the so-called righteous wouldn't dare go. I think I agree with you, and I'll keep to the "regular" road. A very well done work, my friend.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely written. I agree 1000% with your sentiments. February comes but once a year, and Feb. 14, only one day that month. But a love you've described is timeless, and it's the little things that make the most difference. I'm not opposed to flowers or candy, but to hold my hand or give me a hug...those are what make the difference. A very good job! Keep up the good work!

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Review of Shades of Blue  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very cute! I loved reading that...I'd never thought of that before, but amazing idea. Blue can be the color of sadness, and then the leaves aren't ready to go...Clever! Love the poem, and the centering. Of course what other color would you use for the words?

As always, my friend, Great Job!

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amy

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Review of Ageless Memories  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved reading this story. I can picture the scenes vividly in my imagination as I read. How I would have loved listening to the tales the old ones had to tell. A story worth telling over and over again. I loved the way the old warrior remembers his past, and is looking forward to being with his love; his wife. Even the stone being put back in the sand rather than being flung into the river made me happy. An excellent story! Very fitting for an old warrior.
You've outdone yourself!

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Review of Two Lovers  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this. The picture set the tone wonderfully. The theme "A kiss from you, is all I need" felt like an impassioned plea. I liked the centering of the words on the page. I also liked your description of the the form of poetry you used. I enjoyed reading it very much. Keep up the good work!

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amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A fitting tribute to a "task master". I like the visual stimulation of the poem. Looks like a "victor's" cup. Vivid imagery of a God holding a giant red quill comes to mind. Slashing and circling words on a scroll that unrolls down the desk and across the floor. A fun read. Thank you for sharing this. No grammatical issues or typos here to distract from the poem.

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Review of So Unkind  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing. It seems that you have a hate/bewildered attitude towards God. You give vivid imagery in the words written. It's almost like you are battling against an unseen enemy. Reminds me about how Jacob wrestled with the angel of God til daybreak, and in order to get away, the angel touched Jacob and made him lame.

As always, grammar issues and typos are non-existent. Poem cascades down and flows.
I enjoyed reading your poem, although it is a bit sad to me.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing. This must have been a tough poem to write. I cannot even imagine the idea of not wanting a child, especially haven given birth to that child. It sounds so cold and heartless, and I hear the bitterness and resignation in the voice of the narrator. As always, the centering of the words and grammar are impeccable. Well done! A heart-breaking tale to be sure.

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Review of A Bad Father?  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow...I guess from that point of view, it would be hard to honor a Father who would let his children die in front of him. It would be hard for someone to understand how someone could love a person like that. The story is a tough one, and though I understand the point of view, I also understand (only in part...no expert, believe me) a little of God's point of view as well.
The storyoem is well written and executed. No typos or grammar issues. Excellent dialog between the characters of the story. A very good job! Keep on writing!

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Wow...That was a powerful piece. I still have goose bumps from reading it. Abuse is an ugly subject...even uglier to confront and conquer/overcome. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for the encouragement for others to do the same. To over come the shame and the guilt and to conquer. Even though it is an older piece...it is still relevant today. Excellent job!

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I enjoyed reading your short story. The names were imaginative, and I could picture the story in my mind as I read it. I also liked the picture of the white buffalo that you used as the "hero" of the story. It was very exciting, with a bit of romance to boot. I liked how you made it sound like an actual story of the people. You have quite the imagination, and I enjoy reading your work! Keep up the great Job!

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Review of The March  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well written short story about a tragic and horrifying time in history. You have definitely whet my appetite about the book "Night". I am a history buff, and I like the WWII time period to study. Thank you for including the footnotes at the end of your story, for the background and the promotion of the book. Well written, and I could picture the scenery in my mind as I read the story. No typos or grammar issues. The dialog was great as well. Keep up the great work!

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Review of Witch Trials  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Amazing. The original "witch hunt" as it were. I liked how you put the quotes of the accused in the paper. Well written and executed. This was a turbulent and sad time in the history of Massachusetts. I also like how you posted a link to the website you used in your research. Well done! I saw no typos or grammar issues, although I am no expert. Loved this paper, and appreciate your sharing it. Keep up the great job, and Keep Writing! I look forward to reading more of your work soon!

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