This is very well written. I really like how you keep the woman mysterious, I have her pictured as something like a Romanian Gypsy. I also liked how you kept what had happened to Molly hidden for most of the story. I kind of suspected that had happened, but wasn't sure. The only thing I had trouble with was picturing Molly...there weren't a lot of clues as to what she looks like other than being a teen. That is the only criticism I have, and it may just be me needing a bit more and not matter to other readers.
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