I'm not nearly as qualified as most on WDC to review but I feel as though you have an insight on this piece. I truly enjoy reading the Greek tragedies of the past and their modern day counterparts. I feel as though this piece qualifies definitely invokes an emotional response. Below is my review:
First Impression
I truly loved this piece. It was full of heart, soul, and emotion.
Suggestions
I make the following suggestions:
… the last sentence in the first paragraph seemed to be fragmented.
… the second sentence in the second paragraph to be somewhat lengthy (possible “run-on”)
“Still[,] even after 20 long years[.]
Looking around my self [myself]
It only becomes more confused as each long day goes past. [ space] The
I can not [can’t] stop loving her more so each day.
What I Loved
What I loved the most about this was that it gave me a sense of warmth. I can feel the compassion and heartbreak.
Last Thoughts
Whether or not this was inspired by an actually event or from your creative mind, it left me w/ an emotional trail that I can’t even describe. Please keep on writing; this was a very good piece.
Mark A. Boudreaux
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