Loved this. I love a little dog that thinks they are a big dog and the taking a stance because that is his home. I would have taken the dog in and locked the door but you went right after that coyote! It is lucky it tucked tail and ran. Great story, had me on that porch at dusk watching you stare down a coyote!
WOW! I loved this story and I am not usually a prose or short story fan because I really like the depth of a good book but this was different. When you made the colors almost as humans with emotions, depth, character and thoughts. I gave me chills as I read it and how in the end they all work together to bring the prettiest of an image possible. I had a great picture in my head of these colors working as a team and each one doing their part to make the scenery. It is a great story and I can see why you won. Great job! Looking to see more like this!!! Write on my dear friend!
I like this. You nailed it, just because you walk away from something doesn't mean it is going to be easy or the pain isn't going to go away. I felt it. Good job. it made me reflect on parts of my life that I should have a long time ago.
Great piece, loved the wording and got your frustration. I like the last stanza the line "I'm just a thorn between the roses." That just brought it home. Love it! Awesome job! It was a good 8 lines! I am glad you brought it to the front so I could read it. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I felt like I was there. That is so cool how you met Shelley, what a story to live on. Both of you helping in a natural disaster and facing the storm and all its damage. I can see now how you have lasted so long, you had a great start. Tell her I said hi, and I appreciate her lending you to give advice to a lowly writer hoping to make it somewhere someday!
I loved this. I feel like I know parts of you better now. I at least understand some of the things you are going through. I get it, and I am the same way. I feel that no matter what I have gone through in my tough life I am blessed because I am still here kicking it and can have a voice and write. I hope that I can write until I die because I don't feel like this is ever going to go away and I love that.
I wanted to read both parts before I reviewed either poem and I love them both. It isn't easy to be that poetry girl. I have been different since grade school because I started writing in fourth grade and had a passion for it already and have been trying to grow, better my methods and try new types of poetry that I haven't before. This site is great because it was the only way I have been able to get my stuff out there without feeling as vulnerable as I used to think I would. I made the big jump last week and posted something for the first time in my life, but it felt so great, and I have had such great feedback, I am loving being that poetry girl now, because now it isn't so dorky to be smart and know words. Great job!
This is a great piece, that would be great to put in a devotion or a church newsletter to get it out. There are also Christian magazines and devotional books. You are really good and I can tell you have a great Faith like myself. I enjoyed the poem and think you could probably go further with it. I am looking forward to looking at your portfolio and reading some more of your stuff.
So, I felt this while I read it. I have been there I liked it. I like your words and that you know how to use them. I don't usually read a lot of modern poetry because I don't enjoy it but I do like this. I am starting to enjoy reading it more now. Good piece.
I had a picture in my head of what your words built. I read it several times and enjoyed it so much. I am not usually a fan of this type of poetry, but you have changed my mind. Thank you. You don't have to use many words to create something beyond the words themselves. Great poem.
At first, I was unsure how to take it, but once I got into it, I loved it, and it flowed. I love that you thought of this and it turned out so well. I had to become a fan because I really did love this piece. Great job! I am looking forward to reading more of your writing.
To me, a good poem is one you can feel, and I felt this. I have been there, and I totally understood where it was coming from and could relate. "And I was not made to unlove." gave me the chills because I am the same way—I don't know how to unlove someone. This was great. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
I can just imagine the pictures you had going through your head as you wrote this piece. I will admit I read it a couple of times before reviewing it just to ensure I got the flow and feeling down. You said a lot without actually saying it and I think that is one thing that makes up a good poem. Inference, putting the mind where you would like it to be to get your point across. That is very interesting. I love your play with words. This is definitely not an amateur piece.
I had a picture in my mind, and that is part of what I use to gauge how much I like a piece. If I can create the poem in my mind like a movie, then it has hit me. I enjoyed it. Good job.
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