Good imagery and descriptions. I really loved how you wrote the whole thing and how it all ties together smoothly. I can't wait til Christmas! (: Goood job!
Awhh, this poem was really cute, escpecially the ending. I thought it would be an average lovey-dovey poem bit it wasn't . I like how you wrote about how the girl felt. It was really good and descriptive. I really enjoyed this poem. (:
This was a really well written story. I loved all the descriptive details and the way you wrote the story. This also sounds like something that might happen at your house. Now, I'm gonna be even more scared than I already am. Thanks :P But other than that I really liked it! (: Love, Allison!
I really enjoyed this poem and I love how you have seperated the sections by "I love you..." and "I hate you..." I thought that was really creative and fitted the poem well. I also love the way you wrote and the feelings put into this. The fact that people can relate to this makes it really good. Awesome job!
I really enjoyed this poem. I like how you personified the beach by saying "The shores will defrost And awaken from its long winter slumber." Also, I really liked how you worded some of this stuff like "Beach bodies litter what was a previous ghost town." What I really enjoyed is that you just wrote a poem about the beach instead of being in love or mourning over a death. It's just plain and simple without any complications. Good job! (:
I like this story. (: I love the description in the beginning and the funny ending at the end. I also like how you made the characters seem real in the story. Overall, I loved it! Nice Job Kerryyyy (: Love ya!
I like how you described the shadow as an evil thing. I never really thought of it like that. Also, I love the different personalities of the shadow. It's nice in the sunlight but at night it turns deadly. Great Job! (:
Haha, I really like this poem and how descriptive it was. Even though it was repulsive to think about all those things, it was really good. I also thought it was funny when it said "And when he kissed his girlfriend she has the taste of last weeks brussel sprouts. The minute she pulled away from his slimy lips she almost puked." Good job! (:
I really love this story. I didn't see the ending like that, I thought you were actually killing someone! Haha, but It was really good and you should write more stories like this!
I thought this poem was really different and unique. I enjoyed this a lot. In the first stanza I think it means that even though you are sad about what happened in the past you are still happy it is over because now you can finally move on. I can relate to this. You should write more! (:
I really enjoyed this poem and I just love your choice of words in it. Also the ending is very powerful when it said "And that, is the greatest sin." I also loved the line "You left me in the streets, Hungry for the warmth that'll never come" because your are not directly telling us that you feel hurt or abandoned. This is a really good poem.
I really liked this story because it keeps you still wondering what that noise was. When I finished reading it I wanted to read more and figure out what that noise was! It was really creative and relatable for people who are moving out for their first time. I also thought it was really creative when you wrote out his thoughts in italics. Also I still wonder if him and Beth are ever going to hangout. This was a really good story!
I liked the vocabulary you used and how you wrote this poem. I think that you are talking about God and how nervous you are about meeting him. Or it maybe that you are intimidated by him. I like the part in the first stanza when you said "You smirk with coy lips molded in your stern face" because I likes how you worded it and made it more interesting.
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