Thank you. I really enjoyed reading your story. You had me fooled right up to the end. Then came the punchline. What a punchline! I laughed and then I read it to my husband. He was all defensive, convinced he wouldn't like it. After all we are both entered in the same competition and he feels he has to be loyal! And then he laughed. (We're both suckers for a bit of gore and ghast in our horror) Good luck in the competition. You deserve to win with such a succinct and meaty tail.
Thank you for leaving the opportunity open for reviewing this essay. I have been lurking in your portfolio for a while now, enjoying your words, but somehow shy to speak.
First Impression :
Much or your writing has struck a chord of recognition within me. But the thought of having a soundtrack to our lives is one that I have shared and so I was fascinated to see how someone else would approach this topic. I was delighted that you chose to be non-specific as it meant that the thoughts provoked by your writing would not be diverted by the inevitable search for the individual tune or song through the piles of memories I have cluttering my brain. By talking of genres I was able to quickly supply my own examples and get back to the business of reading your story.
Spelling and Grammar :
No problems with this, if you have made any errors, I was either too engrossed with the tale or they are too clever for an amateur like myself to notice.
Flow :
Your story flowed very well for me. I think the fact that I have read other items in your portfolio added to the flow and deepened my experience of this tale, as certain histories, mentioned only in passing here, came back to me and enriched this tale. I felt the chronological approach you used here, to follow your life and relate music to different stages worked very well. The only fault I can find, is that when you talk about episodes that relate very specifically to your life and that I have no experience of, I found it a little difficult to follow as I do not share the context. For example the television show you describe, 'The Children's Corner' and the 'Charming Children' are something I know nothing of, and knowing so little I cannot relate them to anything in my own experience. However this is not a criticism, as we are all unique, and I accept that you cannot write such a personal writing and make all things universal. Nor would I want any one to, as learning new things is one of the joys of reading. It is merely an observation.
Additional Comments :
I really like this. Reading it made me feel comfortable and thoughtful about the role music plays in my life. Your style runs smoothly and is easy to read. And I really loved the upbeat ending.
Thank You
Angel Dust
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Thank you for sharing this.
Angel Dust
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