This is a powerful piece expressing so much disillusionment but with a hope for a better future through some brave and diifficult choices. There is a lot of raw emotion which takes courage to share well done and keep on writing
Arlen
How beautiful. The imagery of your journey is magically conveyed with lovely use of rhyme and a gentle rhythm that conjured the meandering path of life. I love the ending where life's path widens to accommodate two and there is a real sense of contentment here. This was a lovely read. Thank you
George I thought I would turn the favor and read some of your work. I really liked this it transported me right into that tent and you have created a great sense of tension between the two characters. My only criticism is it is too short and I want to read more of this story :). You certainly captured me as a reader and captured my imagination. Gat work
Arwen
I like the imagery here. I was transported to the beach watching a little boy in the sand. I think this is a lovely example of painting a picture with words.
Arwen
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