I am quite a young reader/writer so I am not experienced with spag, I am more about the actual reader and content of the story. I find it quite interesting and love the direct address.It reminds me of the way "a series of unfortunate events" is written but is still different so it seems unique. The story itself becomes quite intriguing and as a reader it makes me want to not put it down.However, the start could be more interesting and intriguing. overall it is a lovely piece and has a nice sense of mystery surrounding it. Sorry if this isn't the type of review you wanted but I don't think I would be any help with spag and stuff like that.
This was very good and I wouldn't be able to do much better. I love how it makes anyone understand it but it could be longer. It is great how it is but there is no advice I can give you but just praise since it is great and I can't write poems well so well done the only thing I would say is I don't know what a Eden is.
Hi im A and I love writing but am bad at handwriting so I only write on my laptop. \my stories are either fantasy (mostly vampire/werewolf love stories) or something to do with my life or for my life. I'm 13 and really hope I improve writing.
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