This was very good and I wouldn't be able to do much better. I love how it makes anyone understand it but it could be longer. It is great how it is but there is no advice I can give you but just praise since it is great and I can't write poems well so well done the only thing I would say is I don't know what a Eden is.
Hi im A and I love writing but am bad at handwriting so I only write on my laptop. \my stories are either fantasy (mostly vampire/werewolf love stories) or something to do with my life or for my life. I'm 13 and really hope I improve writing.